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| xealmox |
Posted on 05-07-2008 01:56
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Langrean Legacy Part 1 ======================================================================= Persons:Captain Lushua Gra'shan,Comm Officer Drerek Mogami and Tactical Officer Mark Rhoadess Location:Morrigas Fla'Quas Naval Shipyards,just jumped out of hyperspace. ======================================================================= a Shockwave went through the ship as it exited hyperspace. ''I knew it,the HS engine was going to blow. That frigate had shot us up pretty good. get the repair crews on the line and inform Fleet Command of the situation and also send a Level 5 Data burst directly to Hiigara with all of our sensor data and logs.'' ''Sir the Shipyard is asking what the hell where doing here right in the open space,what shall i send back?'' ''Send them this:What does it look like, where sitting here cos of a hyperspace engine failure and our reactors are failing so send some medics and tugs over immediately.'' I said to my C.O Drerek Mogami Mark you've got the bridge.'' and left for my quarters to start making sense out of all this what has happened ======================================================================== Several hours later after all repairs have been finished ======================================================================== C.O:''sir,its Fleet Command on the line and they're asking for a secure connection, Me:send the message over to my console and get out of here. My C.O left THAT COUNTS FOR ALL OF YOU LAZY BASTARDS TOO!!!! i opened my personal comm network on my station and saluted to some unknown General i vaguely remembered from training courses to become a Captain of a ship this size. I saluted the general and asked why i had to open a secure channel to Fleet Command. the general spoke and said: you might not know it butt your ship wasn't the only ship to be attacked today. Butt in your case its special cos you got a clear sensor reading of the enemy,the Vagr, and so we have decided to give you our orders directly,Captain Lushua Gra'shan. you are to proceed to the Beligna sector and rendez-vous with 3th Support Fleet. from there you will proceed to the Komok sector and begin deployment of the fleet in the way im sending you right now =======================================================================' Edited by xealmox on 05-07-2008 16:59 |
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| aspasticninja |
Posted on 05-07-2008 04:12
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Well, the story seems okay, but you really have to work on your formatting. Quotation marks, proper capitalization, sentence flow. I suggest writing in Word, or some other program w/ a spelling/grammar check and then copy/pasting it into the post box. That's what I did for Deep Run. As it is, it's kinda hard to follow.
Ford, I don't mean to alarm you, but there are an infinite number of monkey's outside and they want us to go over their screenplay for Hamlet.
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| xealmox |
Posted on 05-07-2008 08:58
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okay thank you i had done it right here in the message box so thanks and nice story you got there BTW
Edited by xealmox on 05-07-2008 09:19 |
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| Komo val |
Posted on 05-07-2008 10:21
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Posts: 392 Joined: September 27 2006 |
Also drop the ''boom'' part, it just sounds wrong. Also it's hard to evaluate the story just from this, so I'll await more chapters for C&C. |
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| xealmox |
Posted on 05-07-2008 16:43
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Langrean Legacy part 2 ======================================================================= Persons:Captain Lushua Gra'shan,Comm Officer Drerek Mogami and Tactical Officer Mark Rhoadess and Executive Officer Dylan Makran Location:Morrigas Fla'Quas Naval Shipyards,just jumping into hyperspace ======================================================================= CO: Sir,we've got a green light for Hyperspace entry Me  kay roll in our bays and inform Fleet Command of our HS exit pointCO,XO and TO:yes sir Me:thanks for your help,Morrigas Shipyards and godspeed you all make it Co:go silent and lock all bulkheads in place SHIP WIDE:this is the CO all personnel prepare for HS jump and bulkhead closure Me  ilot plot a course for these exact coordinates and erase the exit point from the ships computersPilot:we are gaining speed sir...........close to HS entry speed.......and jumped My XO(executive officer) came up through the lift and saluted me Me at ease,Makran,you have the bridge XO:Yes sir several hours into the HS jump * just awakening from an alarm * CO(through com system:sir we've detected a High Energy emission coming from a nearby nebula and its on our path,shall we exit Hyperspace ? I started to think and came up with a plan no head around the emission and if it moves to intercept,exit hyperspace and shoot it out of the sky whatever it might be TO:the target is moving to intercept and a small group of what appears to be a fighter group and a small escort carrier have broken off from the main emission source Me:load all Point Defense Guns and bring the Langrean Array online(will explain later) TO:yes sir,PDS teams are standing by and the LA is online and ready to be charged Me:Exit Hyperspace NOW quantum wavefront has dissipated sir,one of the pilots said Me:good bring us broadside to the enemy ships and let it appear we are having engine failure,so send us in a spinning or Quebec class maneuver CO:sir were getting a LVL 5 Encrypted Message from Hiigara,what shall we do Me:FRAK,just read it aloud I don't care that my crew will hear it ill probably be placed in a court marshal anyway CO:When arriving at the Tokugawa Nebulae hail the ships there with a P-5 class encoded signal,P-5 thats not been used for ages now,why the hell would they want us to send such a signal anyway cos its mainly used on pirate vessels cos of its low tracking rate. TO:sir the ships are powering their weapons and heading for midships Me:Start the encoded signal transmission and include our assignment code CO:Hailing with P-5 class encoded signal started TO:enemy ships have broken off attack and are heading back towards the emission CO:where getting a P-5 encoded transmission from those ships Me;send it to my desk in the ready room CO:yes sir minutes later Hello Captain of the Prototype (Blackened out) class Fortitude This is Fleet General Fych Paktu and your welcomed to follow us into the nebulae to receive your instructions for the mission your going to undertake please leave all but essential staff on the Personnel Carrier we've sent to you and move into the nebulae then confine your Bridge staff to their quarters and meet me at airlock 17B with a security team present End of Message Received date:N/A Receiving ship:N/A Sending Source:Source Unknown Me:what the hell,there's no date,receiving ship or even a source of the transmission I left for the Bridge when I walked in I noticed that my staff non essential staff already was leaving for their Personnel Carrier Me:all of you listen carefully,we are about to enter this nebulae for updated mission files and a repair job on the Langrea System so I need all of you to stay quiet and only speak when spoken to All remaining staff on the bridge saluted me and the CO sent a ship wide announcement through the ship ''Take us in'' I said to no-one in particular and the pilot fired up the engines Me:Mark get your Ship defence team suited up in Honour Guard Suits and meet me at airlock 17B to escort a General to the Core Room and lock us in TO:Yes sir |
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| xealmox |
Posted on 05-07-2008 16:53
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NOTES Morrigas Fleet shipyards is a major Borderline Shipyard complex composed of a Big shipyard in the middle of a gravitational field projected there by a solid barrier of asteroids(the Shipyards so big it acctualy pulls the asteroids in towards itself if not for its Defenses ripping any asteroid coming to close to shreds or moving it with a Salvage Corvette the ship my story centers around is a reverse engineered version of a Progenitor Weapon system found on a ship in the Langrean points(points where a object is safe from gravetic pull) of the Tasdonis Maquel system(Since they where unable to activate the ancient ship before it got destroyed enroute to a Hiigaran Research Station Its a borderline patrol vessel hence that its HS engine failed when arriving at the morrigas fleet shipyards because it had fought a group of Vagr trying out the defences of the Hiigaran border and badly damaged its HS system among its other badly damaged systems Edited by xealmox on 05-07-2008 16:56 |
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| CIWS2000 |
Posted on 05-07-2008 19:08
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i think you meant to say Lagrangian points |
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| xealmox |
Posted on 05-07-2008 19:56
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yes i think so too LOL didn't see that one coss my notepad just auto corrected it to Langrean points without me noticing |
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| CIWS2000 |
Posted on 06-07-2008 00:05
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sometimes even spell check is useless especially when it auto corrects stuff you type and is insistent on using the wrong word |
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| xealmox |
Posted on 06-07-2008 01:31
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yes indeed well finally am back home so can probably after i reformat my pc putt up some screens to guide the story and also show my story's prototype carrier/Ion cannon-ish weapons platform(its also a carrier cos it has 3 retractable hanger bays to transport smaller fighters(needs to retract to hyperspace and takes about 20 secs to retract/extend) their retractable cos their actually buried in the ships hull as not to distort the quantum wavefront wich forms when entering,during,and after exiting Edited by xealmox on 06-07-2008 04:54 |
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| xealmox |
Posted on 06-07-2008 14:44
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PILOT:entering nubulae sir,we're detecting multiple Megalith sized objects at the center of the disstortions and a fleet of smaller ships around it Me:activate the Radiation shields and get decontamination crews and stations on standby XO:yes sir,moving through the eye now CO:the admiral has reported in and is sending a small ambassador class vessel towards us Me kay,Makran you have the bridge'and me and the Tactical Officer both went our seperate ways me towards the Airlock,he towards his team awaiting him a deck above us Sir docking of Ambassador class vessel confirmed,awaiting your orders Me(through shipwide com ) ALL personell report to your quarters immediatly and lock yourself in, i repeat ALL personell report to your quarters immedatly and lock yourself in IF any of the remaining crew sees you wandering abiut the ship they have permission to kill *airlock doors slowly open and the corvettes door slides open* *i salute the general and start to walk towards the elevator when i get grabbed in my neck and almost thrown against a bulkhead* What the FRAK was that for, you moron Guard of the general:Sorry sir it looked like you were carrying a gun with you so i had to be sure Guard locks himself out from the core room and locks us in General:Sorry for the trouble you've gone through butt this information is highly classified and not even Karan knows of its existence yet so we had to take all precautions so that no one else hears this Just a small update this time as im upgrading my pc to a higher level wich requires a complete overhaul of the whole network at home too and so it might take a little bit long before i post here again |
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| Komo val |
Posted on 07-07-2008 11:48
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Still haven't had time to read it, however there's one thing that really stands out (and in a bad way): The dialogs. Unless you're making a play you should drop the: Me:bla,bla Him:bla,bla ... For example the last dialog: ''Entering nubulae sir,we're detecting multiple Megalith sized objects at the center of the disstortions and a fleet of smaller ships around it'' the pilot reported while staring at the sensor readings. ''Activate the Radiation shields and get decontamination crews and stations on standby'' I quickly replied. Radiation is a real hazard out here. The XO quickly replied ''Yes sir,moving through the eye now'' and went on ordering the various decontamination crews on standby with amazing velocity. Valar, the CO, broke the brief silence ''the admiral has reported in and is sending a small ambassador class vessel towards us'' ''Okay,Makran you have the bridge'' I said while taking a last look at the tactical map. I don't know why I do that, actually, but who cares, I got more important things to do right now. I exited the bridge virtually at the same time as the Tactical officer, however we soon headed our separate ways... |
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| xealmox |
Posted on 07-07-2008 18:03
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Got it all in the way you suggested and i find it looks better now too Langrean Legacy Part 1 ======================================================================= Persons: Captain Lushua Gra'shan,Comm Officer Drerek Mogami and Tactical Officer Mark Rhoadess Location:Morrigas Fla'Quas Naval Shipyards, just jumped out of hyperspace. ======================================================================= a Shockwave went through the ship as it exited hyperspace. ''I knew it, the HS engine was going to blow. That frigate had shot us up pretty good. get the repair crews on the line and inform Fleet Command of the situation and also send a Level 5 Data burst directly to Hiigara with all of our sensor data and logs.'' ''Sir the Shipyard is asking what the hell where doing here right in the open space, what shall i send back?'' ''Send them this: What does it look like, where sitting here cos of a hyperspace engine failure and our reactors are failing so send some medics and tugs over immediately.'' I said to my C.O Drerek Mogami Mark you've got the bridge.'' and left for my quarters to start making sense out of all this what has happened ======================================================================== Several hours later after all repairs have been finished ======================================================================== ''sir, its Fleet Command on the line and they're asking for a secure connection, send the message over to my console and get out of here. ??My C.O left?? THAT COUNTS FOR ALL OF YOU LAZY BASTARDS TOO!!!! i opened my personal comm network on my station and saluted to some unknown General i vaguely remembered from training courses to become a Captain of a ship this size. I saluted the general and asked why i had to open a secure channel to Fleet Command. the general spoke and said: you might not know it butt your ship wasn't the only ship to be attacked today. Butt in your case its special cos you got a clear sensor reading of the enemy, the Vagr, and so we have decided to give you our orders directly, Captain Lushua Gra'shan. you are to proceed to the Beligna sector and rendezvous with 3rd Support Fleet. from there you will proceed to the Komok sector and begin deployment of the fleet in the way im sending you right now ======================================================================= Langrean Legacy part 2 ======================================================================= Persons: Captain Lushua Gra'shan,Comm Officer Drerek Mogami and Tactical Officer Mark Rhoadess and Executive Officer Dylan Makran Location:Morrigas Fla'Quas Naval Shipyards, just jumping into hyperspace ======================================================================= CO: Sir, we?ve got a green light for Hyperspace entry *the doors all close around the ship, you can hear the HS module charge up and an alarm informs us of a charged HS module* okay roll in our bays and inform Fleet Command of our HS exit point yes sir * the ships HS window starts to appear and quickly expands to its window shaped form* thanks for your help,Morrigas Shipyards and godspeed you all make it go silent and lock all bulkheads in place this is the CO all personnel prepare for HS jump and bulkhead closure plot a course for these exact coordinates and erase the exit point from the ships computers ?we are gaining speed sir...........close to HS entry speed.......and jumped? My XO(executive officer) came up through the lift and saluted me at ease Makran,you have the bridge from now on Yes sir several hours into the HS jump * just awakening from an alarm * CO through com system: sir we've detected a High Energy emission coming from a nearby nebula and its on our path, shall we exit Hyperspace ? I started to think and came up with a plan no head around the emission and if it moves to intercept, exit hyperspace and shoot it out of the sky whatever it might be the target is moving to intercept and a small group of what appears to be a fighter group and a small escort carrier have broken off from the main emission source load all Point Defence Guns and bring the Langrean Array online(will explain later) yes sir,PDS teams are standing by and the LA is online and ready to be charged Exit Hyperspace NOW Quantum Wavefront has dissipated sir, one of the pilots said Good bring us broadside to the enemy ships and let it appear we are having engine failure, so send us in a spinning or Quebec class manoeuvre sir were getting a LVL 5 Encrypted Message from Hiigara, what shall we do FRAK, just read it aloud I don't care that my crew will hear it ill probably be placed in a court marshal anyway When arriving at the Tokugawa Nebulae hail the ships there with a P-5 class encoded signal,P-5 that?s not been used for ages now, why the hell would they want us to send such a signal anyway cos its mainly used on pirate vessels cos of its low tracking rate sir the ships are powering their weapons and heading for midships Start the encoded signal transmission and include our assignment code Hailing with P-5 class encoded signal started enemy ships have broken off attack and are heading back towards the emission we?re getting a P-5 encoded transmission from those ships send it to my desk in the ready room yes sir *minutes later* Hello Captain of the Prototype (Blackened out) class Fortitude This is Fleet General Fych Paktu and your welcomed to follow us into the nebulae to receive your instructions for the mission your going to undertake please leave all but essential staff on the Personnel Carrier we've sent to you and move into the nebulae then confine your Bridge staff to their quarters and meet me at airlock 17B with a security team present End of Message Received date:N/A Receiving ship:N/A Sending Source: Source Unknown what the hell, there?s no date, receiving ship or even a source of the transmission I left for the Bridge when I walked in I noticed that my staff non essential staff already was leaving for their Personnel Carrier all of you listen carefully, we are about to enter this nebulae for updated mission files and a repair job on the Langrean System so I need all of you to stay quiet and only speak when spoken to All remaining staff on the bridge saluted me and the CO sent a ship wide announcement through the ship ''Take us in'' I said to no-one in particular and the pilot fired up the engines Mark get your Ship defence team suited up in Honour Guard Suits and meet me at airlock 17B to escort a General to the Core Room and lock us in Yes sir entering nebulae sir, we?re detecting multiple Megalith sized objects at the center of the disstortions and a fleet of smaller ships around it activate the Radiation shields and get decontamination crews and stations on standby yes sir, moving through the eye now the admiral has reported in and is sending a small ambassador class vessel towards us okay, Makran you have the bridge and me and the Tactical Officer both went our separate ways me towards the Airlock, he towards his team awaiting him a deck above us Sir docking of Ambassador class vessel confirmed, awaiting your orders (through ship wide com ) ALL personell report to your quarters immediately and lock yourself in, i repeat ALL personell report to your quarters immediately and lock yourself in IF any of the remaining crew sees you wandering about the ship they have permission to kill *airlock doors slowly open and the corvettes door slides open* *I salute the general and start to walk towards the elevator when i get grabbed in my neck and almost thrown against a bulkhead* What the FRAK was that for, you moron Sorry sir it looked like you were carrying a gun with you so i had to be sure for the generals live is more worth than anybody on this ship including myself because if he weren?t here Hiigara would probably already have fallen to the Vagr forces *Guard locks himself out from the core room and locks us in(the general and me)* Sorry for the trouble you've gone through but this information is highly classified and not even Karan knows of its existence yet so we had to take all precautions so that no one else hears this NOTES Morrigas Fleet shipyards is a major Borderline Shipyard complex composed of a Big shipyard in the middle of a gravitational field projected there by a solid barrier of asteroids(the Shipyards so big it actually pulls the asteroids in towards itself if not for its Defences ripping any asteroid coming to close to shreds or moving it with a Salvage Corvette the ship my story centers around is a reverse engineered version of a Progenitor Weapon system found on a ship in the Lagrangian points(points where a object is safe from gravetic pull) of the Tasdonis Maquel system(Since they where unable to activate the ancient ship before it got destroyed enroute to a Hiigaran Research Station Its a borderline patrol vessel hence that its HS engine failed when arriving at the Morrigas fleet shipyards because it had fought a group of Vagr trying out the defences of the Hiigaran border and badly damaged its HS system among its other badly damaged systems Edited by xealmox on 07-07-2008 18:28 |
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| xealmox |
Posted on 08-07-2008 18:19
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Langrean Legacy part 4 Persons: Captain Lushua Gra'shan, Fleet General Fych Paktu and various Captains from other ships Location: Briefing Room, aboard the ******** class Super carrier Necromancer, inside the Nebulae Cluster Thanks for you all gathering here and I hope this little rebellion can be crushed in time so Hiigara can be spared another Makaan spawning from their conquested space As you might know, or not, we are inside the Flycatcher Nebulae Cluster near the Vagr-Hiigaran Border to break through their defences in concert with 2TH,3TH and 5 TH EFRAF (Emergency Fast Response Attack Fleet) at these points *a 3d projection activates and displays 13 points out of witch 4 are the points they will take on* But sir, cant we just jump right past the border here Well see that?s the next problem, and that?s this, its self replicating , so whenever we try to kill it, it replicates itself before its other hull gets destroyed, and it also emits a field witch blocks all HS movement *the 3d screen shows a massive (possibly progenitor) warship* And all of the other regions are so heavily populated we risk them knowing we are coming Any of you got some other ideas then speak up now Okay then that?s settled This is the order of group commanders *Captain Lushua Gra'shan will spearhead the assault at point 6 and 7 *I will take my group and take points 8,5,1 and 13 *Captain Hirsh Malory will take points 2,3,4 and 5 *and the remaining points are assigned to Captain Loch Gra?shan You?ve been handed out group placement and vessel information I would like to point out to stay out of the Langrean Arrays 2 KM blast radius when firing We will depart for our separate coordinates in 2 days so every group has chance to get refuelled and rearmed And that concludes this meeting If you all will excuse us I need to speak the group leaders in private *data missing*moving on to next file in order* Location: bridge of Fortitude, point 6 Sir we?ve got incoming fighters on all vectors And frigates headed our way Tell the fleet to launch fighters, activate weapons and stay away from us for the first 30 minutes of the battle Group confirms and is moving to battle Charge the LA array and fire at the nearest enemy cluster with a Helix shot LA array charging, fighters are trying to breach outer defensive perimeter Tell the ships to move closer together and open up a new frequency for the PDS teams to chat on for optimal coverage Sir, we can?t otherwise we will get burned by your shots Okay, move towards the enemy at ramming speeds, charge the LA again for a full power shot this time and power our HS module to jump to point 7 *HS Module charging* Sir we?ve got a breach at the back of our lines Flak frigates are taking care of it Jump away but first fire the array at that carrier Yes sir, firing LA array Carriers engines have been destroyed and its got major structural damage to its main hull and fighter bays *HS window opening* Location: bridge of Fortitude, point 7 Sir the Malacant has hailed with a permission to leave the battlefield for emergency repairs Permission denied ,tell them to clamp their ship to our engine array and then disable our engines, then send a repair team to their ship and repair their damaged systems TORPEDO WAVE INCOMING Brace for impact, I said as our main weapons(so its only the cannons and most of the PDS systems) and our hanger bays got ripped to shreds DEPLOY THE LA array in MIRROR mode then fire and tell the Malacant to activate their engines at full speed But sir that will kill us No it won?t trust me Firing LA array Were speeding up WARNING *increased energy build-up in the LA array core * Open dispersion valves 1 through 71 and get us the hell outta here *energy flying out of the dispersion valves* Moving around towards the fleet, sir Activate the Collection Panels The energy witch was released from the valves has hit the main enemy carrier group and has caused a power failure in their systems All systems are getting Enormous amounts of energy, the power core can?t handle all this energy sir Fire the LA array continuously towards any target in reach yes sir almost 90 % of their fleet has been destoyed Power is dropping towards normal levels Tell the Malacant to move us to the back of the fleet and then disconnect from orur hull and get back to the fight And start repairs on our damaged systems The group at point 6 has reported that they have broken through and are securing the site for additional reinforcements Were getting chatter from all over that the points have been secured Tell the Malacant to fire its full missile spread to X368.63 Y464.68 Z68.74 and tell the carriers to call in fighters and jump right into the middle of the surviving Vagr ships YES sir Carriers have called in fighters and hypering out now, the Malacants missiles are being intercepted Turn the missiles towards the enemy fighters and fire another spread at the Vagr ships All ships move in for the kill, and activate the HS inhibitor field Carriers have hypered in and have launched fighters Last of the Vagr forces in point 7 are destroyed. cleaning up for reinforcements Edited by xealmox on 08-07-2008 18:29 |
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| xealmox |
Posted on 19-07-2008 12:10
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Langrean Legacy part 5 *from this bit on ill have a go from the Super Carriers perspective before switching back to the Fortitude This is Fleet Command Prepare for Hyperspacial insertion of Automated Turrets and Constructor class vessels for construction of permanent defensive emplacements Get all groups to form up with the Necromancer at point 12 and prepare for Hyperspace Burst Jumping *a form a Experimental Hyperspace Jumping witch tightly compresses all the hyperspacing ships so much they are only one molecule thick(takes so much energy that the hyperspace providing ships need at least be 3 Battlecruiser class ships for a fleet off 12 Frigates(the entire fleet has more than 50 BC's in there so thats 600 frigates and uncounted smaller vessels)(Carriers and other ships larger than a frigate can Burst Jump by themselves so I won't mention them)and then decompressing to normal size* Necromancer reports that Hiigaran forces have been alerted and are headed this way to support us ''this is the Necromancer,all ships turn on Hyperspace fields and Burst Jump towards the Qwel Moshre Command Station'' Burst Jump successful,we've arrived in the Qwel Moshre Sensor Net without alerting the Vagr forces in the area ''all ships,our first priority is to disable all communication means in the area so the Vagr won't be alerted of our presence here,after the first objective is completed all ships will move towards the Qwel Moshre Command Station and try to capture it,if thats not possible we will destroy it,is that acknowledged'' all ships have acknowledged orders and are moving to their separate targets the Scout frigates have taken position and are deploying their sensor grid we now have complete coverage of the System,sir Multiple casualties reported all over the system,those bastard were waiting for us Incoming BC class hyperspacial signals from in front and behind us SHIT,where surrounded by Vagr forces with no way of moving because of the Burst Jump which drained our reactors Friendly signals acknowledged,the Vagr battlecruisers are outnumbered 5 to 1 sir Multiple incoming missiles launched from the Battlecruisers,where diverting all the available power to the PDS grid,Hold that order and turn on our engines,but sir,well never have enough time to get away, im not looking to get away,so just do it,yes sir,Now perform a barrel roll and halfway through divert all power to our sensor scramblers then quickly divert all power back to the engines and finish that barrel roll Missiles are still headed for us,sir,performing barrel roll,switching power to the sensor scramblers,diverting back to engines and finishing of the barrel roll maneuver *most missiles pass right under the Super carrier and some hit the carrier* Minor damage to main sensor array and Section D25 block 6 has been destroyed,ER teams en route to repair it Vagr battlecruiser line almost completely destroyed,additional reinforcements from our side hyperspacing in Main Attack Group Attires has breached final defensive perimeter of the Vagr Station and is sending in Marine frigates to Capture it Scout Frigates report the final hyperspace inhibitor line has been destroyed and that all detected Vagr forces have been destroyed,their sending out their attached scout squadrons to ''Ping'' the area and perform additional sensor sweeps Artillery Frigate Group Marius reports that the Vagr Station has been captured and their moving in to re enforce it *i am basing my story of regular HW 2 but with some of my own units as well* Send a message to Hiigara: The Doorway has opened but whats inside we don't know Send Construction Ships immediately to begin building a permanent wall here so that no Vagr forces will ever pass through here without having to breach it first Sir,detecting several energy spikes in the region,ITS A MEGALITH Group hyperspacing in *after several minutes the megaliths power up* their deploying in a wall like formation and launching unknown fighter class ships Interceptor and Scout squadrons are intercepting the unknown ships Squadrons have been destroyed The Fortitude and its Sister ship is moving towards the derelict Another ship is hyperspacing in it looks like the ship the Fortitude was based of the derelicts are opening up some kind of energy conduit Whatever their doing we must stop them,launch all available combat ships and notify the fleet where going into combat with the Fortitude and the other ships *This is just a small bit of the last part of my story butt im going to tweak my new pc a bit so am not going to post the other part today (maybe tomorrow) |
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| xealmox |
Posted on 02-08-2008 00:24
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Sir we're receiving a transmission from the derelict hulls and the fortitude and her sister ship ''This is the Wall of Lehuria,you have violated *$#%&^ space and we are forced to take action against this,leave now or be .......... destroyed'' ''sir science teams on board of the accompanying shipyard have found the purpose of the energy conduit'' well what about it then? Its a energy capacitor for a solid state hyperspace inhibitor field 15 light years across in every direction sir we're receiving reports on the enemy,their ships appear to be modified movers without the clamps and in place of that some kind of energy cannon with a incredible reload time of only 3 seconds Battle group Antares and falcon have been annihilated,and the main body of enemy ships is headed for our position the shipyard science team reports they can replicate those modified movers with our own construction facilities and make their ships think we are friendly,for now at least give them permission and take the bridge,Locust Yes sir,but may I ask where you are going im volunteering myself for the piloting of the movers,and also im taking the battle to the enemy,any objections to that,no sir,good I hope Sajuuk will save his wrath for the enemy Skull squadron and Mauler squadron are launching from bay 2 Flight 17 has completely left the hanger bay,Mover countermeasures are now in place ''this is Flight 17 acknowledging signal broadcast,whats the sit rap on the enemy troops over'' ''Flight 17 the enemy has ceased all movement and is doing nothing at the moment,the Fortitude and its sister ship however have begun powering their LA arrays and have deployed what seems to be a forcefield'' ''Flight 17 acknowledges,all movers have passed through the enemy lines undetected and are headed for their respective targets'' *a Battlecruiser suddenly hyperspaces in and all hell breaks loose receiving another transmission from the wall ''you have not listened to our orders,we will seal the wall and you will not pass anymore on your foul crusades through our territory'' ''This is lieutenant Hayes to Battlecruiser Mogamir,what the hell are you thinking jumping right on top of our fleet,you've just lured the bastards this way'' ''don't you worry about that,lieutenant we've set our trap with very careful planing'' *a fleet of over 50 battlecruisers and about 20 carriers jumps in in such a pattern each enemy now has at least 3 battlecruisers and 1 carrier being able to fire at it or launch fighters at it* ''your pittyfull strategy's are not working against us,we shall clear this holy place with our lances and drive you out with the strength of our fingers alone'' ''The Keeper is aware. The Keeper understands. The Keeper has seen the enemy'' *46 keepers appear out of slots in the wall built to make it look like their part off the wall ''Frak,lieutenant Hayes, move your ships into point blank range with the fortitude and fire at the energy conduit points LZ-13 and MD-36 with a emp blast and after that bombard those sections with ion cannon fire,then we will take care of the keepers'' ''sir we've got fire on deck 2 and a decompression in the forward mess halls also weve got incoming drones from the wall this is Lieutenant Hayes to all decks brace for impact,we've got multiple drones headed on a ramming course with our ship sir the outer flak wall has been breached by drones range is 700 meters and counting 600 500 400 300 incoming hits to our sensors arrays 200 we're in firing range sir,no countermeasures detected all ships fire at will *the keepers stop moving ''The Keepers are not aware. The Keepers do not understand. The Keepers can't see the enemy'' ''We The Keepers shall comply. We The Keepers shall bring down our enemy's. We the Keepers have seen the enemy's'' *suddenly the Keepers come to life again and start shooting each other and the wall to bits Several days later *Location:the Necromancer,in high orbit of a conquered planet nearby the Qwel Moshre systen Persons:General Hayes,Fleet General Lushua Gra'shan,Fleet Cluster Overseer Hirsh Malory and Homeworld Defense Commander Fych Paktu ''the invasion is going just as planned,other than that progenitor relic activating again but that was a in calculated risk'' said Paktu as he looked at a Battlecruiser Group entering hyperspace ''Well it got us one step ahead of the Vagr at avoiding hostile progenitor vessels and even gave us a lot of derelict keepers to study,not even mentioning the technology probably inside that wall'' said General Hayes as he looked at his own Fortitude class Battlecruiser being built ''it looks like we will still have a hard time getting through looking at the battles we've already fought not even counting the countless ships lost'' he said ironically as a almost bare ship(all the armor was stripped of) was being towed in to be repaired ''I cant see us parting now that all of us got assigned to the same sector,but going to defend Hiigara is a even more difficult job than all we ever experienced,now lets go home shall we''Gra'shan then shouted an order to the nearby pilot who eagerly began preflight checks'' |
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